Kikajon Posted December 26, 2014 Share Posted December 26, 2014 On the tenth day of Christmas, Benjen gave to me: Ten skins of mead Nine direwolf pups Eight wighted rangers Seven snowy Kingdoms Six Kings a clashing, Five black cloaks, Four dragonglass daggers, Three Wildling raiders, Two three eyed ravens, And a Bloodraven in a weir tree Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lady Blizzardborn Posted December 26, 2014 Author Share Posted December 26, 2014 On the eleventh day of Christmas, Benjen gave to me: Eleven frosty Others,Ten skins of mead,Nine direwolf pups,Eight wighted rangers,Seven snowy Kingdoms,Six Kings-a-clashing,Five black cloaks,Four dragonglass daggers,Three Wilding raiders,Two three-eyed ravens,And a Bloodraven in a weir tree. When we're done, I'm going to rewrite this to fit the melody a bit better. And I'm going to change my own contribution for Day 3 to "three baby dragons." :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Adara Posted December 26, 2014 Share Posted December 26, 2014 Why not "three dragons dancing"? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kikajon Posted December 26, 2014 Share Posted December 26, 2014 Yes, I have repented the dragonglass daggers!! Too alliterating isn't it? It needs to be changed. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kikajon Posted December 27, 2014 Share Posted December 27, 2014 What may go by twelves? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kikajon Posted December 27, 2014 Share Posted December 27, 2014 Twelve horns a-blowing? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Adara Posted December 27, 2014 Share Posted December 27, 2014 Twelve horns a-blowing? That sounds nice :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mark Antony Posted December 27, 2014 Share Posted December 27, 2014 I like and I'm sure Benjen would approve Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kikajon Posted December 27, 2014 Share Posted December 27, 2014 On the twelfth day of Christmas, Benjen gave to me:Twelwe horns blowing,Eleven frosty Others,Ten skins of mead,Nine direwolf pups,Eight wighted rangers,Seven snowy Kingdoms,Six Kings-a-clashing,Five black cloaks,Four winds of winter,Three Wilding raiders,Two three-eyed ravens,And a Bloodraven in a weir tree. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kikajon Posted December 27, 2014 Share Posted December 27, 2014 Two Valyrian daggers? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lady Blizzardborn Posted December 27, 2014 Author Share Posted December 27, 2014 Well now that we've finished it I can tweak. I'm writing down suggestions, so keep 'em coming! How does everyone feel about "Ten little fingers?" ;) And should we consider changing it to "George Martin gave to me"? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lady Blizzardborn Posted December 27, 2014 Author Share Posted December 27, 2014 Here's my first draft of the revised version (last verse only). Tell me what you think. On the twelfth day of Christmas, Benjen gave to me: Twelve heroes fighting (or dying)Eleven Others wightingTen daggers glintingNine Wildings raidingEight rangers missingSeven snowy kingdomsSix direwolves howlingFive clashing kings!Four blowing hornsThree young dragonsTwo secret Targsand a Bloodraven in a weir tree. ETA: adding seven, don't know how it disappeared in the first place. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Adara Posted December 27, 2014 Share Posted December 27, 2014 still think three dragons dancing would fit better than young dragons. Although the two three eyed ravens were cool. What happend to seven? :lol: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lady Blizzardborn Posted December 27, 2014 Author Share Posted December 27, 2014 still think three dragons dancing would fit better than young dragons. Although the two three eyed ravens were cool. What happend to seven? :lol:It would except that at that point in the song the gifts aren't doing anything in particular. I'd have to have more dragons, at least six in total. Though it was nine ladies dancing, so it would really work best to have nine dragons dancing. Plus they aren't dancing yet so... Fixed the post. There's really only one three-eyed raven. We can't let Bloodraven take over the whole song. :D Six harpies hissing might fit better with eight rangers missing.Or eight rangers scowling (ie at Jon [emoji6] )But its good for a first draft.I think it clashed a little too much with "Bloodraven"I just thought...Why not try ten year summer fadingNine wildlings raiding?I wasn't looking for rhyming lines. That one pair just happened. I actually counted and there are at least eight rangers who are currently missing, including Benjen. Too many syllables there, sadly. I'm not all that attached to the daggers, particularly since there are more than 10. It's a shame there are so many threes. We can't have all of them. Three stags for monarchs. Three lions lying. Three murders granted. Three Freys gone missing. Three Tully siblings. Three bad betrayals. Three Boltons bolting. Three Seastone claimants. On and on it goes. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kikajon Posted December 28, 2014 Share Posted December 28, 2014 Bump !this is the last version? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kikajon Posted December 28, 2014 Share Posted December 28, 2014 Of course!!!I meant, is this the final version agreed upon or shall we change some verse?There could be endless version, we could keep one for thus year a another for the next? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lady Blizzardborn Posted December 28, 2014 Author Share Posted December 28, 2014 No, this is by no means a final version. I consider it a first draft of the revision. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kikajon Posted December 29, 2014 Share Posted December 29, 2014 bump Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kikajon Posted December 30, 2014 Share Posted December 30, 2014 On the twelfth day of Christmas, Benjen gave to me: Twelve heroes fighting (or dying)Eleven Others wightingTen daggers glintingNine Wildings raidingEight rangers missingSeven snowy kingdomsSix direwolves howlingFive clashing kings!Four blowing hornsThree young dragonsTwo secret Targsand a Bloodraven in a weir tree The bolded ones are the real numbers, I would keep them for sure, what do you think? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lady Blizzardborn Posted December 30, 2014 Author Share Posted December 30, 2014 Jon sent out three teams of three rangers. One team was killed. Two teams' fates are as yet unknown. That's six, plus Benjen and Stonesnake. Thus eight rangers missing. But then...there could be other rangers who are missing that we just don't know about. Yes, I think keep the ones we do know the numbers on, and work on the others. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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