peterbound

Can we just put *spoilers* in the title. These fucking tags are annoying as all get out.

Goddam that's bad. Seriously man, somewhere in your mind you have to know that, right? It's fucking stanek/goodkind level bad.

Yeah, I'm starting to think this is some form of performance art. Also, what's wrong with being blunt? I've never understood the problem with that trait.

First thing that caught my eye as well. Not a good sign when the descriptors are confusing right out the gate. Not sure 'well rounded' and 'petite' fall into the same category. Really tried getting through the few chapters you had posted, chief, but holy shit that's some horrible writing you've got going on there. You're trying too hard to be gimmicky with the language, the plot is on the back burner, and the fucking purple prose is making my goddam eyes bleed. I attempted to make sense of what was up on your website, but I still have no fucking clue what the story is about. I get you are trying to sound olde fashion-y, but it just comes off sounding silly. Focus on the story more, tighten up the text, and then focus on word choice/type. You're letting your gimmick run your mind. Not a good way to go. Seriously, and I'm not trying to be a dick here, but this stuff isn't good. I know that's hard to hear, and I'm sure you'll deflect, call my avatar stupid, and somehow attempt to invalidate my opinion, but it doesn't change the fact that the stuff you put out into the world is painful to read and the work of someone trying too hard, and not having a fucking clue of what they are doing.

David, many of us on here are prior, or current military. If you have any questions, please let us help.

Blah, this shit goes to 11! Best episode of the season. Seeing Cat walk thru the lord trying to keep her dignity was a scene they hammered. Seeing Rob in a moment of weakness, and beating the fuck out a tree like a child was great. The Ros scene.. really? I'm not complaining about seeing boobs.. just me. I also think it was giving background about the Pycellle character to non readers, and just how long he's been around the 'Game' Seeing Tyrion being manipulated by his father was splendid, and all the Jon' scenes were great. I did have minor beef with the hair sticking around after the fire.. but fuck it, maybe it's being built into the mythos of the show that /all/ of Dany is immune to fire. Loved it.